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How to keep people watching your videos for longer.

George Blackman
Jan 20
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Hey!

I’m excited to announce the launch of The Retention Hub - an ever-expanding library of YouTube retention graphs from 30+ niches.

This could be the fastest way to supercharge your understanding of video retention and keep people watching your videos for longer.

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But more on this at the end!

First, let’s get into 3 more reviews…

1 - A wise dog.

Title: I Magnet Fished 100 Miles of Ocean And Found This!
Creator: WifiEli
Average % viewed:
55.7%

He’s gonna find $50,000,000,000 using just a magnet.

What to repeat:

creating characters from nothing

  • The creator meets a dog on the beach and imbues it with personality by describing its (made up) thoughts and motives.

  • This then threads back into the story later when the dog is re-referenced.

  • This is the advantage you have if you’re shooting a video that’s part-scripted, part-improvised - you can retroactively turn people/animals you met into characters that became crucial to the narrative.

  • So ask yourself when you’re on location, “is there the potential to turn anyone into a character and thread them into the narrative of the overall video?”

storytelling

  • Establishes the context of the video quickly.

  • Plays with the tension by repeatedly implying we might be about to land on some big treasure.

  • But, even when we don’t ever find it, he presents a nice moral - that the real treasures were the dogs (people, and forks) we meet along the way.

pacing

  • Watch from the start and see what happens at 0:27.

  • This video is another prime example that altering the pacing of your video makes it much more engaging because it causes pattern interrupt in our minds.

What to improve:

momentum

  • Yes, I am just looking for another way to say ‘pacing’.

  • Because as good as the pacing is for the most part, it slows a little too much during S3, which could be responsible for the drop.

  • It’s important for your audience to get to know you, but I think it was slightly too indulgant between 1:28-1:46.

  • I would have preferring going from “it’s not funny” straight into “Day 2…”

Takeaway

Comedy and personality are absolutely good things, but be careful they don’t impact momentum too much.

2 - It’s behind you!

Title: YOUR DOPAMINE ADDICTION IS RUINING YOUR LIFE
Creator: Staebo
Average % viewed:
15.2%

You heard the man!

What to repeat:

humour

  • The highlight of the video is in the very last line.

  • Outa nowhere, he puts on an U.S. accent and says “read a god dang book”.

  • The problem is we don’t see much of this personality until the end (which I’ll talk about shortly).

What to improve:

background / framing

  • People make snap judgements on your video, so certain visuals matter (regardless of your gear).

  • In this case, the fist two things I notice is the messy background and the framing.

  • Framing: there’s a lot of wasted white space above the creator.

  • Background: this feels messy and unintentional. The creator is also at the same height as all the stuff, so he doesn’t stand out.

overusing fast cuts

  • Relying too heavily on this technique makes the video feel unnatural.

  • There are sometimes 2-3 fast cuts within single sentences.

  • Yes, we want to cut out dead air, but don’t overuse this.

  • Be aware (during filming) of how long it’s taking you to deliver each line. If it feels like you’ll need to cut a tonne of dead air with a sentence, just re-record the sentence.

repetition

  • We don’t see much of his personality until the end, because the video spends a lot of time repeating similar information.

  • I’m firmly of the opinion that 99% of creators should script talking head videos, because it stops you rambling and repeating yourself.

  • Every sentence should be intentional, building on the last to contribute towards the overall point/story/narrative.

  • I’m 100% certain this video wasn’t word-for-word scripted, and the result is too much repetition.

Takeaway

Spending a little extra time tidying your background and framing yourself well on camera could literally make or break retention - it gives an instant impression to the viewer.

3 - The power of your voice.

Title: The World's Biggest Megaprojects (2023)
Creator: BusinessLoop
Average % viewed:
40.1%

A skyscraper over 1km high…? 😳

What to repeat:

concept

  • Big concepts like this are highly intriguing, and the video delivers on exactly what the title promises.

What to improve:

voiceover

  • To me, it sounds generic and unenthusiastic… almost like an AI.

  • We spoke above about pattern interrupt, and although this hook is written well, the delivery feels bland - I don’t feel like I’m going to have a good time.

  • Unfortunately, people will always make a quick decision about whether to commit 7mins of their time to something, and the voice/person we’re spending it with will be a large factor.

storytelling

  • The first minute of the video is almost entirely CGI/maps.

  • But around 1 minute, we get some exciting, real footage of boats on the Bering Sea.

  • Tension could have been dramatically increased by starting with this part.

    • e.g. “crews of X00 people have spent the last Y years on the Bering Sea, one of the world’s most dangerous bodies of water. But why? …”

  • By reversing the order of information, not only do we create more intrigue, but it’s grounded in something more tangible because we’re seeing real and treacherous footage.

  • Now, as a viewer, I’m wondering: “Why would anyone do that?!”

  • Then we reveal the Bering Tunnel and explain more about it.

Takeaway

Ask yourself, “can I create more tension by reversing the order I reveal information?” Create intrigue first, and make the point second.


That’s all for this week, but I’m excited to talk a little more about…

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George 👋

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